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    dots Submission Name: Hole in your heartdots
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    Author: Stargazer89
    ASL Info:    21 / F / MI
    Elite Ratio:    6.3 - 19/3/7
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    dotsHole in your heartdots
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    Look through all the rubble,
    Lost memories,
    A photo,
    Even a key,
    Where does this key belong?
    I look up and there he is prince charming,
    But who knew it would end like this.
    A war?
    No worse solitude,
    I can't feel anything,
    The light hurts my eyes,
    I can't breathe,
    almost as if my air supply got cut off,
    I gasp for air,
    then he grabs my hand for one last farewell,
    I was glad to have meet him,
    Glad to have loved him,
    Glad he was the one to put me out of my misery,
    So the key you ask?
    Was the key to my heart,
    He still holds the key,
    But no longer has the Heart.





    Submitted on 2010-04-12 00:23:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well i feel pretty cool about this , all image just remind me many things i went through! thanks!
    | Posted on 2010-04-12 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]


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