This is remarkably well written. You started with one version, "I was only looking for an answer/I was only holding on too long" and closed the piece with the same graceful transition but in reverse. Personally, it spoke to me about what is happening with something in my life.
I'm adding you to my favorites. I really loved this piece, truly.
I enjoyed the dichotomy in this. Pairing night and dawn, living and dead, future and past within the same stanzas is refreshing, imho. Two sides of a coin...and certainly true to life and life's paradoxes.
(a brief aside re: previous comment... I didn't get any cowboy vibe from reading this; I am blind, ignorant or both. And heartfelt words aren't worn laundry on the line; they are comfortable, well traveled shoes)
I enjoyed the read! Thanks for posting and sharing.
I was only looking for an answer
I was only holding on too long
It never really meant much for the moment
And now the future is past and gone
Could it be that someone found a reason
Could it be that somewhere thereís a spark
You were only looking for the question
The poem would be just fine without those lines. The repetitiveness isn't very appealing or very rhythmical. It's too heartfelt. Dried up and hung on the line. Too forceful. Maybe even a bit too dull. And not very complimentary to the poem, which, by the way, has a pretty neat image of saloon-type love. Like the song Dustland Fairytale by the Killers. Why are people obsessed with cowboys? Is it because they're distant fuc4ers? Or because they carry guns? They're all shallow and dusty. It's not very desirable for those who want something substantial. It's like one of those images, or phases you go through, trying to be this masculine THING. Aloof. And dangerous. They're suicidal pussies anyway. Why did you do this to the future generations, Clint Eastwood...
I like this poem without those lines, did I tell you that? Read it. Don't have to change it, but read it. It sounds less desperate and heartachy.