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    dots Submission Name: I need you.dots
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    Author: Mythica
    ASL Info:    17/female/KY USA
    Elite Ratio:    1.79 - 11/31/16
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 713
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 577



    Description:
       I was sitting in my english class when these words rushed into my head. I was about to do something when the next thing I knew, I was in the submit section typing these words. I have no clue why they were written, but if I blanked out to write them, they must mean something to someone. Here it is. I will not get rid of it.


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    dotsI need you.dots
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    They say absence makes the heart grow fonder.
    But for me it seems much stronger.
    Something is wrong with me I know
    And yet it is something I do not let others see.
    Why can I not see it?
    What is wrong with me?
    My heart is heavy yet joyous
    Yet feelings all around me are infectuous.
    Why must I be like the wind
    And carry what has been thrown to me?
    I need help.
    I flutter in the very wind that I create.
    Where is my solid rock
    To keep me rooted.
    I need you, now.
    I need you.




    Submitted on 2010-04-12 13:57:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      " Why must I be like the wind
    And carry what has been thrown to me?"

    I like that. Things aren't heavy when you're wind, but they are all the more consuming.

    Great Work.

    --Daisy
    | Posted on 2010-05-02 00:00:00 | by sensetofeel | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not sure how I can explain it, but this poem sounds really... relatable. I think there's usually this time of confusion or moment of self-doubt when someone we truly care about leaves us. Nice. :)
    | Posted on 2010-04-12 00:00:00 | by LaylaViolet | [ Reply to This ]


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