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    dots Submission Name: One More Timedots

    Author: Mythica
    ASL Info:    17/female/KY USA
    Elite Ratio:    1.79 - 11/31/16
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 530
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       This is over a discussion from my step-dad. Everything in here is true. It has happened in a fight or something between me and him. I have somewhere to go if he kicks me out. I have more hope than I have patience.

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    dotsOne More Timedots

    One more time you said
    And I was out the door
    One more time
    And I would be heard from nevermore
    One more time you said
    And I was on my own
    One more time
    And I would be all alone
    Just one more time.

    One more time
    You have hit and caused pain.
    One more time
    You have yelled and accused
    One more time
    You ignored instead of listened.
    One more time
    You tell me I will be without
    One more time
    I am on the verge of tears
    Just one more time

    One more time I said
    And I am out the door
    One more time
    And I am heard from nevermore
    One more time
    But I won't be on my own
    One more time
    I will not be all alone
    Just one more time.

    One more time....

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      I know how personal this poem is , further the fact its not a vindictiveness to me of personable , but what strikes me the most is knowing how many young people have similar problems . I really feel for you that you can't find any rapport with your step Father . I guess some people just aren't reachable . Oh well , I guess you just make the best you can with what you've got . Glad to see you have some friendlies . Till later .
    | Posted on 2010-04-26 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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