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    dots Submission Name: You part Twodots
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    Author: bluemayskye
    ASL Info:    31/F/Portland
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 78/89/24
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsYou part Twodots
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    You and your busy busy self
    Made no time for another's heart...
    You called and demanded a visit.
    But you suck the joy from the room,
    So why should you be allowed?
    You won't listen.
    You won't love.
    You won't care.
    You never learned respect.
    Well, don't expect to be welcome here...
    You should see yourself
    Even you would be appalled!
    The things you say hold no logic.
    You convince yourself...
    You think you are just being you...
    But you are absolutely insane.




    Submitted on 2010-04-12 15:30:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2010-04-20 00:00:00 | by bluemayskye | [ Reply to This ]
      Jessi,

    This one reminded me of the angst of Bob Dylan's "Positively Fourth Street". Have you heard that one?

    This sounded like it was about someone who had for years held sway over the writer's life, and she is now breaking free of those bonds.

    Interesting.

    Psyve
    | Posted on 2010-04-16 00:00:00 | by Psyve | [ Reply to This ]


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