Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Stop Killing Moles dots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: istalkmurdoch
    Elite Ratio:    7.06 - 129/48/25
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 572
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 545



    Description:
       like it, hate it?


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsStop Killing Moles dots
    -------------------------------------------


    I'm stuck in a room
    with four windows and one door
    while people are speaking
    their words hit the floor

    when the words landed
    it created a big hole
    dug through the ground
    then was eaten by a mole

    but what they failed to notice
    until the next day....
    when the mole ate their words
    he soon passed away

    you wouldn't believe
    the things that they spoke
    they were so rotten and rude
    they made a mole choke




    Submitted on 2010-04-13 10:13:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Okay! I like it!

    My parents taught me not to say horrible things, so I guess the moles have been fairly safe underneath here, but can you tell me what happens to all the totally vicious thoughts that I never give voice to? Maybe they are killing bziitles on the other side of the Universe, how can we know? Anyway I expect I like moles better than I'd like bziitles and thank you for the timely reminder about them.
    | Posted on 2010-05-02 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    184414

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    winners circle written by ShyOne
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (6) written by endlessgame23
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    Etiquette written by saartha
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (5) written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    Carry written by saartha
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    Push written by JanePlane
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    written by Daniel Barlow
    True Death written by layDsayD
    Ache written by rev.jpfadeproof
    My Four Seasons written by faideddarkness
    untitled written by ShyOne
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    written by Daniel Barlow
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry