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    dots Submission Name: Do I miss you?dots
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    Author: Dreamer5009
    ASL Info:    16, Male, USA
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 73/53/28
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsDo I miss you?dots
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    Do I miss you?
    Do you play across my mind?
    You've strayed from my view
    and left me behind.

    I want to have you back
    become part of my life
    But contact we now lack
    And I'm tempted by the knife

    I look at where we were
    Before the sorrow of the present
    Before the things to occur
    Before I began to resent

    But you live your life
    and I live mine
    it fills me with strife
    As we both walk the line

    I need you this hour
    My red-headed teen
    My prettiest little flower
    Against your shoulder, I lean.




    Submitted on 2010-04-14 11:53:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      if you gave my your number I could call you. I have so much going on. I do miss you Aussi.
    Rachel:)
    | Posted on 2010-04-14 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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