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    dots Submission Name: To Be Burneddots
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    Author: LaughingGuest
    Elite Ratio:    1.64 - 5/6/14
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsTo Be Burneddots
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    Fire fell from the sky
    to leave nothing alive.

    All the beasts of burden
    were too slow at learning
    so now the earth's burning
    in all of it's false glories
    and incorrect stories.

    Fire fell from the sky,
    but something ancient survived.
    Once it was ash it burned again
    releasing the archaic evils within.

    Like those that came before
    it gouged out their eyes.
    Laughter reveled in war
    at their enemies cries.

    The cycle went on eternally
    as they continued prematurely
    begging and pleading "More. Please more."
    Reality; what a whore.




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