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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    If I fell would you watch
    Their world pass me by
    These people are like puppets
    Rent-a-buddy just to try

    All are replaceable
    It costs a bit more to fix
    They move to and fro, like musical chairs
    Gone once they get their kicks

    But I thought you were different
    You stayed at my side for so long
    I guess there is no exception
    You're temporary too, I was wrong

    But their ignorance annoys me
    Companions are best gone
    I'd choose solitude in a heartbeat
    Need no shade under the sun

    I had the world for forever
    Yet lost it, blink of an eye
    I feel we still belong together
    But I don't know what else to try

    Please don't be a puppet
    The darkness that was my past
    I'd wait for you forever
    But the ground is coming fast




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