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    dots Submission Name: Art of the heartdots
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    Author: vLame
    ASL Info:    21/m/lbc
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 16/21/57
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 1031
    Average Vote:    4.3333
    Bytes: 645



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    dotsArt of the heartdots
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    make me happy, ill make you sad
    kiss me, i'll make you cry
    hug me, and you'll wish
    you could take it back
    back to the start before
    corruption of the art of the heart
    took hold of your eyes of others
    and made your heart beware
    of the treachery of emotions
    all these things we have done
    live with we must, keep away the strain
    of a real love, in vain?
    defend with words
    we keep our souls lonely
    absurd, we recoil from the shield
    it yields fear,
    i'll never make you sad
    because you won't let me make you happy




    Submitted on 2010-04-16 09:15:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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