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    dots Submission Name: My Memory Lives ondots

    Author: mysterious one
    ASL Info:    24/f/in my head
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 58/57/17
    Words: 252
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsMy Memory Lives ondots

    You find me in a heap
    Lying on the floor
    You pick me up and then
    You take me out the door

    You know where I have been
    You know what I've become
    You don't take me to a doctor
    Oh no, you take me to the son

    You lay me on the alter
    You look to heaven above
    You see this woman oh Lord
    And I know that she is loved

    I open my eyes
    And stretch my arms
    I promise to you
    I'll stay out of harm

    You take me to my home
    And lay me on my bed
    You tell me get some rest
    You could have been dead

    I toss and turn
    I break a sweat
    I know what I need
    I don't care about regret

    I get to my feet
    And head to the door
    I walk down the street
    I only need one more

    I find the man of sin
    I give him what he wants
    The look he gives me next
    Will stay with me and haunt

    I take the tiny stash
    And head back to my place
    I line it up and then
    I bring it to my face

    The room begins to spin
    The light begins to dim
    I close my eyes and then
    I become part of the has-beens

    My memory lives on
    I know this to be true
    My body may be gone
    But my soul is alive inside of you

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      Wow i liked this quite a bit. At first i was wondering what your poem was about but as i read on i started to understand. Nice job and i wish you luck :)
    | Posted on 2010-04-16 00:00:00 | by cherrywillow | [ Reply to This ]

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