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    dots Submission Name: Frowning Angeldots

    Author: cherrywillow
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 29/47/32
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       This is an older poem i wrote a little while back based on my boyfriend on one of his depressing days.

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    dotsFrowning Angeldots

    A frowning angel stands before me.
    Beautiful green eyes have become dull with pain.Sunny skies have drifts of clouds.
    Something so peaceful filled with such grief and pain.

    My dearist love, why do you frown?
    Please brighten my heart and soul with your smile.Your words have a slight chill,
    your touch has a slight shake.

    What cruel fate has been set opon you?
    What hateful glares have stared at you?
    My heart it yearns to know your pain,
    and my eyes yearn to see your smile.

    Submitted on 2010-04-16 16:55:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree with Frank Maguire (below). It seems a raw piece of verse (if that interests you) but it is beautiful and rich poetry with a lot of experience and emotion packed into a few words!

    Also, it sounds like a true story, and that gives it extra power as a poem.

    It was probably a very sincere experience, writing this poem; but also, by studying what makes it so good, you become a better artist who can get these effects on purpose any time; but I hope you don't end up a skilful but insincere weasel like me.
    | Posted on 2010-05-02 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      Very emotional, quite presonal in many respects. Very well written.....straight from your heart.

    | Posted on 2010-04-16 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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