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    dots Submission Name: What Lies Beneathdots
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    Author: Realitywarp87
    ASL Info:    25/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 27/53/63
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsWhat Lies Beneathdots
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    There's a part of me that can not be fixed
    Discrpencies that should be eclipsed
    By the better person that is equipped
    In the troubled body where I exist

    It's a shallow being that is made known
    A selfish person that's always prone
    To cause contentions, a skill he's honed
    Which ultimately finds him all alone

    As many changes that he tries to make
    They are always in vain because he acts fake
    Everyone notices, they can not mistake
    The person he truly is, the being he can't shake

    All he wants is for someone to see
    Past the monster within him trying to get free
    One who could become anything he wants to be
    So there can finally be good inside of me




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