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    dots Submission Name: Shopping for Zombiesdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 401
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsShopping for Zombiesdots

    Meanwhile on the other side of life
    Thereís an eleven-year-old girl
    Learning how to be a wife

    Sheís out shopping on her computer screen
    Itís the latest game
    On the Internet
    For the trackers to get their market set

    And meanwhile itís her only dream
    To go shopping on her computer screen
    She knows how every single product fits
    She knows how she can earn more credits

    Hey little girl itís the only way
    And itís all gonna be you someday
    Youíll be the picture of a fashion queen
    Even if you have to sell your body

    Meanwhile on the other side of life
    Thereís an nine-year-old girl
    Who may not live to be a wife

    Sheís out there scrabbling in the rubbish heap
    Maybe she will find enough to eat
    She doesnít have time for the latest game
    And all her friends are the same

    And meanwhile itís her only dream
    To live like the little girl on the T.V screen
    She knows that ever mouthful counts
    Even as she picks the maggots out

    Hey little girl itís the only way
    At least youíll make it through today
    Youíll be the picture of a fashion queen
    A rag doll of the latest trend

    Meanwhile on the other side of life
    The eleven year-old-girl
    Grows up to be a wife

    Sheís out there shopping like she always did
    But complaining she needs a bigger fridge
    She says the world is in such a state
    But sheís a hundred pounds overweight
    And thereís something crying in her soul
    Something she was never shown
    Something in her heart which hangs on her lips
    But itís a life of shopping for zombies

    And meanwhile on her T.V screen
    Thereís a ragged little girl she has never known
    Picking her way through a rubbish heap
    Ankle deep; looking for something to eat

    But itís the gentle little smile from soft brown eyes
    Cutting through lie of our lives
    She picks up something and rushes home
    The proud little owner of a chicken bone

    And meanwhile on the other side
    We all just accept; this is life
    And thereís something crying in our souls
    Something weíd rather not know
    Something in our hearts and hanging on our lips
    That itís a life of shopping
    For zombies

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      I like the zombie comparisons in both poems (though to be honest I'm a huge zombie fan) And even though you're not talking about literal zombies the message still rings true. Falling into society's traps, walled in by the unrelenting media, desensitised by television "We all just accept; this is life" It's sad. Everyone has it in their heart somewhere to do good yet few take the chance to escape from their "reality" and actually make a difference. Too caught up in their own lives.....sad
    | Posted on 2010-05-15 00:00:00 | by all2rest | [ Reply to This ]
      Zombies again, huh?
    To be honest that's why I looked at this peice.
    You should branch out and find a different comparision. It's a decent poem, but I can tell it was written by someone young. IDK how old you are but it seems like it was written by someone in their teens. But, it was really good for someone of that age group.

    | Posted on 2010-04-21 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]

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