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    dots Submission Name: How to Kill a Zombiedots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 238
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsHow to Kill a Zombiedots
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    Its all tinsel and wrap
    Isn’t it
    All holiday family
    And thanks giving turkey
    For chocolate box crap
    All gi’me bright shinny object
    And Christmas lipstick
    For the living walking dead

    All paint and powder
    And smeared on plaster
    Band Aid and bandage
    For wounds you can’t live with
    It’s all a flack jacket
    Of glittering bullets
    A bright arena
    Where everyone is the enemy

    Clockwork and clock in
    Living retrospect
    Zombies
    Murmuring the MUR MUR MUR
    Of a brainwashed ideology
    You can almost hear the chinking jangling chains
    Of instant coffee
    Instant gravy
    The instant; get your meaning here

    Get your message here
    Get your truth
    The sick and facile holy bible
    Of Gods written word
    To pronounce you; idiot
    While you dribbling on a keyboard
    Spending hours tweaking photographs
    Living dead
    In your own life

    It’s all fourth of July
    And fireworks
    All ooohhh and aaaahhhh’s
    And dazzled mediocre
    All frantically got to have
    All bleating mesmerized sheep
    Counting the cost of poverty
    And beating the drum
    Of yo heave ho slavery

    All everyone is; is the enemy

    It’s all porn for your belly
    And loves pornography
    All a mindless welter
    Where you can’t choose what to be
    It’s a birthday of lies
    A happy go lucky
    I’m an ok aren’t I really

    A self-portrait
    Of a sycophant
    Walking dead
    Living Zombie






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      What sick [censored] would want to kill a zombie?
    I am beginning to feel rotty-sweet when I read you... you're not one of these Yes-Master sheep-in-peep-streeped clothing, types here, I'm guessing-tho-could-b-wrong. But you're the freshest read I've found so far, so get used to me, or block me if you don't want me around. Cuz, I'm gonna be aRound.

    As for this write, Innovative... fresh unique spins of frenzy on beaten-down-to-clichd subjects... Exciting to see something new from someone not catering to the Clink-Me-Positive polls herein.

    Build a path in the woods, and the zombies will find you... while the Living Dead walk on the highway.
    | Posted on 2010-05-09 00:00:00 | by LucyStarr | [ Reply to This ]
      But, nothing on how to actually kill the zombies.

    Usually, I hate this anti-society, "I don't give a rip", people suck, overused concept of mindlessness, kind of peice. But, I rather enjoyed this one. With the imagry and the well conveyed (not as clich) you did well. I loved this stanza, "It’s all fourth of July
    And fireworks
    All ooohhh and aaaahhhh’s
    And dazzled mediocre
    All frantically got to have
    All bleating mesmerized sheep
    Counting the cost of poverty
    And beating the drum
    Of yo heave ho slavery"

    POINT: Major distraction was the apostrophes. Drove me crazy. If on accident, try to fix it. If on purpose I'd lose it.

    Carrie:)

    | Posted on 2010-04-21 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]


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