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    dots Submission Name: Be a Good Girldots
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    Author: isis_lenore
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 459/207/102
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    dotsBe a Good Girldots
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    Be a good girl and play nice, she was told

    All it taught her to do was lie, lie, and lie.



    Nobody likes the truth it seems, delusional

    People prefer hearing what they want to hear.



    You are not two faced unless you get caught

    So donít get caught, donít you dare get caught.





    Submitted on 2010-04-18 20:34:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      What response do you want society lie-backed or truth wacked! Even in elite some response makes other readers concur even when its an example of what we all tend to do at some time or the other. People tend to wanna sound coach-like when they novices. I feel your write up is realistic,accusing and insinuates correctiveness not yet perceive by the majority like a parody campaign. Idea is fresh but not altogether new. Fine though.
    | Posted on 2010-04-19 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]
      Isn't it stupid how society wants people to pretend they are what society wants them to be?
    maybe that not the point of your poem but thats what i got out of it.
    One line i thought was a little off : " nobody likes the truth it seems, delusional"
    The last words is confusing ..
    didnt know if the comma was there on purpose or not ?
    anyway .. keep it up
    | Posted on 2010-04-19 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]


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