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    dots Submission Name: Rumorsdots
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    Author: Mist8ke
    Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 1/3/1
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 396
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 503



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       About a rumor...


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    dotsRumorsdots
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    Right now I find myself dangling
    On the edge trying not to fall in
    Into the sea of rumors and lies
    Fighting to keep my head up high

    I've never felt so pitiful and grey
    As when I was about to say
    Those hurtful words I knew were fake
    I felt like I was at an all time low today

    Walked away without a word
    Still tempting to slip off my tongue
    My regrets from my past mistakes
    Stopped me from falling in again




    Submitted on 2010-04-19 17:49:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Agreed with Temidayo. I felt the hurt in this poem. Rumors fuel rumors, but sometimes it's so hard to let it go. This probably could have turned into a 10 page story if you actually let it all out...I know that feeling!
    | Posted on 2010-04-20 00:00:00 | by Lynda | [ Reply to This ]
      
    | Posted on 2010-04-19 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa the phrase regrets from past mistakes do these fuel the rumours. If so I get why you let it go. Rumours can be so damaging- your poem gives me the impression your going about sad because of the rumours yet confronting no one?! Your short poem paints volume once you let it sink in. Creativity meets simplicity. I WOULD HAVE APPRECIATED more detail but I guess you did'nt spread the rumours. Keep writing. I will drop by from time to time.
    | Posted on 2010-04-19 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]


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