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    dots Submission Name: Vintage Tearsdots
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    Author: MmR
    Elite Ratio:    5.45 - 468/442/138
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       yeah, it's been a while


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    dotsVintage Tearsdots
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    And in a perfect strangers eyes
    They would never know...
    they could never see
    all the pain of you that has been burdened upon me.

    And when the cobwebs find their way
    to the corner of my mind
    I lovingly brush them all away...
    to keep the only part of you that was willing to always stay.

    And wherever I may wander
    this stitched up heart of mine
    will search for a face that will never be...
    just to keep the pain of you that has been burdened upon me











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      This makes me think of an incomplete love--by that I mean perhaps a child lost before it was born, or a romance, conceived but never brought to fruition but remembered sadly for all that could never be.
    A pain kept alive for the very comfort it brings.
    | Posted on 2012-10-23 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      For some reason I get this picture
    in my head of an attic a chest
    a small table and a rocking chair.
    Then as if in a dream there comes
    a creaking of tread an indistinct
    figure sets down a bottle of wine
    lights a candle and opens the chest.
    Whereupon a skull is taken out
    wine is poured and a soliloquy
    ensues.
    | Posted on 2012-09-29 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      should be a "perfect stranger's eyes"

    but wow...your poetry really moves me...it is so not about form, structure and being a certain way...it is about the heart and guts of it...

    every word is real and human...like the speaker is undressing in front of the reader...a little shy but saying here it is...look at me....look at me...

    and feel what my heart feels.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-08-16 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      yes, of course I love you
    almost like forever
    let the sad angels
    sob amen

    what is, what isn't
    a lasting force
    let the crux
    of the games begin
    | Posted on 2010-04-21 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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