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    dots Submission Name: Lust (Part VII of VII)dots
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    Author: FlickerofHope
    ASL Info:    17/Male/TN
    Elite Ratio:    7.15 - 92/82/34
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 969
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 753



    Description:
       Finally my Seven Deadly Sins series is complete. This poem was actually written on 9-14-09, but I was only able to submit it now for various reasons. This is a complete contrast to my writing stlye now, however I believe this one still has its good qualities.

    I tried to portray Lust as something seductive, yet ultimately disgusting and something that is more or less done secretly. I hope this one was one of the best ones I wrote for this series.


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    dotsLust (Part VII of VII)dots
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    I am the hollow eyes that seek you,
    Those ravenous orbs of perversion,
    That follow your evry move.

    I am the gnarled hand that longs to touch,
    To feel your soft flesh,
    As it caresses against mine.

    I am the shriveled lips that speak,
    Such sweet lies I weave,
    As I whisper in your ear.

    I am the mangled mind that imagines,
    Picturing you as I desire,
    In whatever manner it pleases me.

    I am the force that tempts you,
    Spilling into your consciousness,
    Assaulting you with bestial desires.

    I am the most beautiful of objects,
    And there is nothing you desire more,
    Than indulging in my seductive pool.




    Submitted on 2010-04-21 07:24:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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