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what happened?

Author: BleedingEyes
ASL Info:    15/f/michigan
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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what happened?

I get up and out of bed,
Try to forget all those things we said.
It's now over for good,
I promised myself to leave it right there here I stood.

People always tell me things will get better,
But I find myself writing you half a letter.
How did we fall so far apart,
You left me not knowing where to start.

I am here now trying to find out how to survive,
And struggling to just keep myself alive.
I remember when you were a hero in my eyes,
You were always there to give me a suprise.

But those are just long lost memories of mine,
Maybe this is our life design.
I spent so many days cold and lonely,
I believed that you were my one and only.

There are some things in my head I'll take to my grave,
But it won't be all that love that I gave.
You made me so emotionless,
And you gave me all this stupid stress.

I try to believe in things I can't see,
But is there even hope for me!
My back is up against a wall,
And it's hard for me to keep standing tall.

Life just isn't worth it anymore,
You left me standing at the door.
You said it's time to say goodbye,
And I just wondered... why?

Submitted on 2010-04-21 19:06:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  beastlii rymin lol
| Posted on 2010-04-23 00:00:00 | by monkiigirl | [ Reply to This ]
  Like so many other writings this one is about the exact same thing wirtten in another form. please try to be more original

it made me feel bored since i've read this kind of stuff a million times.

other than the good old Cliche feeling, you are a really great writter, please try harder.
| Posted on 2010-04-22 00:00:00 | by Fogfactor | [ Reply to This ]

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