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    dots Submission Name: Goodnightdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 283
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 527
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    Bytes: 1658



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    dotsGoodnightdots
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    a thought rushed down the creek

    and leaves scattered from the mouth of the woods

    a relief of some great pressure that forced
    a tightness on the world
    was released in one great scream

    flights were canceled as planes boarded and the whole of life had to wait

    she sat in the middle of an itchy field and swatted at bugs that flew around her eyes
    nats that she didn't want to squish and kill and so she just endured

    she rocked back and forth methodically hoping to confuse them and give herself a moment without being pestered

    the wait grew into the night and a chill crept over her bare shoulders

    new smells rose from the earth and finally the nats seemed to rest
    she swallowed hard and felt her heart beating harder inside her chest

    she began to feel afraid that this would never be over
    that she would be forever sitting here or in some itchy uncomfortable place just waiting

    and she knew this wouldn't end while she thought about it

    she surrounded herself with dirt for warmth and began to build a house of sticks and rotten leaves

    she prayed that her fears and her pain would be taken away and for as long as she would have to wait there would be peace

    the woods never moved or gave a hint that they would
    faith giving them the appearance that change was in the the air
    and settling the night with hope
    while the girl and all the turning of the world slept








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