[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: The Demon Drink.dots

    Author: edcherry
    Elite Ratio:    6.91 - 197/67/22
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 637
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 413


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe Demon Drink.dots

    The Demon Drink.

    I don't know where I'm going, but it seems I'm going fast.
    Trees and guys, cats and dogs, blur as I go past.
    I tried to grab a passing post when I became aghast,
    that the world was in a spin, and I would be outcast
    before I could contain my thirst, to make that rum the last.

    Submitted on 2010-04-22 19:12:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      Ha. All right. Drunken state of mind. Alcoholism. Kids getting drunk. Now, don't get me wrong, but I can't really make an in-depth analysis of this cos, well, the content is pretty clear as it is. I like this, despite the rhyming. I'm not fond of rhyming (end rhymes, really). It's tolerable. So, yeah, take care of that rum.
    | Posted on 2010-04-27 00:00:00 | by JenFlynn | [ Reply to This ]
      It seems to me that you have a problem with drinking
    or either have a close relationship with someone who has a problem.Keep up the good work and hold your head up.If i took this the wrong way then i appologise
    but I have been there before so keep it up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    | Posted on 2010-04-24 00:00:00 | by mistiekidd | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL, this reminds me of a night when I decided to leave a party drunk and my friend was trying to stop me. I ran down a hill and hit the back of a van and almost broke my nose...

    Luckily, I was on foot, though, and yeah I saw the van... two, in fact! And I knew one was imaginary, and one was the real one, but unfortunately, I tried to run through the real one...

    Boy, that hurt.
    | Posted on 2010-04-23 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Break Up written by WriteSomething
    Push written by JanePlane
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    To Glow written by krs3332003
    Bond written by saartha
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    The Promise written by annie0888
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    Deaf Dumb and Blind is no excuse written by poetotoe
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    Date night written by expiring_touch
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    A Sonnet for Nina written by SavedDragon
    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    untitled written by Chelebel
    It's been a while written by Sharati_hottie
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    May 31 2018 written by Chelebel




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]