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    dots Submission Name: The Demon Drink.dots

    Author: edcherry
    Elite Ratio:    6.91 - 197/67/22
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    dotsThe Demon Drink.dots

    The Demon Drink.

    I don't know where I'm going, but it seems I'm going fast.
    Trees and guys, cats and dogs, blur as I go past.
    I tried to grab a passing post when I became aghast,
    that the world was in a spin, and I would be outcast
    before I could contain my thirst, to make that rum the last.

    Submitted on 2010-04-22 19:12:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ha. All right. Drunken state of mind. Alcoholism. Kids getting drunk. Now, don't get me wrong, but I can't really make an in-depth analysis of this cos, well, the content is pretty clear as it is. I like this, despite the rhyming. I'm not fond of rhyming (end rhymes, really). It's tolerable. So, yeah, take care of that rum.
    | Posted on 2010-04-27 00:00:00 | by JenFlynn | [ Reply to This ]
      It seems to me that you have a problem with drinking
    or either have a close relationship with someone who has a problem.Keep up the good work and hold your head up.If i took this the wrong way then i appologise
    but I have been there before so keep it up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    | Posted on 2010-04-24 00:00:00 | by mistiekidd | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL, this reminds me of a night when I decided to leave a party drunk and my friend was trying to stop me. I ran down a hill and hit the back of a van and almost broke my nose...

    Luckily, I was on foot, though, and yeah I saw the van... two, in fact! And I knew one was imaginary, and one was the real one, but unfortunately, I tried to run through the real one...

    Boy, that hurt.
    | Posted on 2010-04-23 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]

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