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    dots Submission Name: Perdition's Palmdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPerdition's Palmdots
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    It became a day of tears
    Wept in the brightest hearts of beauty

    The silent population; awoke from their sleep

    Anaesthetised in perdition's palm
    Every man the enemy of every mans’ son
    Of every woman’s anguish born
    To daughters of the battlefields

    The blood of these the lie had spilled

    The slaughter of innocence to luxury
    The opulence of its property

    A day of tears
    Wept in deepest recognition of beauty

    When the silent people; waken

    Written, the sorrow
    In a burning choke of the centuries children
    With no cause to become or awake in conscious
    Have served their misbegotten heroism

    And for all their love
    Merely to rest, blinded and lead
    To find comfort in perdition's palm

    A day of grief
    For having lived within the clutch of fear
    A day of tears
    When love will plead
    And retributions need to wreak
    Upon the revenge of centuries

    Every man the enemy of every mans’ son
    Of every woman’s anguish born
    To daughters of the battlefields

    Every death to the flags and patriotism's of slavery
    Every birth to the lie
    The blood of these the liars have spilled

    The slaughter of innocence to luxury
    The opulence of its property
    Burning in perdition's palm








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