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    dots Submission Name: Malice in Wonderlanddots
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    Author: SammySueYou
    ASL Info:    23/f/nm
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 90/78/30
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I wrote this based on what I am going through right now.


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    dotsMalice in Wonderlanddots
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    I created a world inside of my head,
    I chose to live my life there instead.
    I abandoned my friendships and family ties,
    I replaced the truth with various lies.
    inside a wonderland lacking of rules,
    full with carnivorous rabbits and bumbling fools.
    I will never be deceived by the friends in my brain,
    they can't make me worse because I am already insane.
    A twisted reversal of what's inside Alice,
    a blinding tunnel smothered in malice.
    I can't be late because I am decades too early,
    the mad twatter came off as mad hatted and surly.
    I tried to make plans for the tea party at eight,
    but I had to cancel and he grew very irate.
    I went on to see the wicked red queen,
    she told me nice things when I was told she was mean.
    Never listen to a small towns perception,
    learn for yourself if it is truth or deception.
    I had to leave this place and travel back to reality,
    so much time passed and relationships had reached their finality...




    Submitted on 2010-04-24 21:51:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very well written, and it sounds a lot like what I've gone through before. Even though it's hard at times, reality is the best place we can be. That place that you speak of is made up of false expectations, and will drive you into the ground with disappointments... so it's good you know now. Make amends with those who are important.

    Please Keep Writing :P
    istalkmurdoch
    | Posted on 2010-04-28 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]


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