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    dots Submission Name: R.I.P my lovedots
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    Author: robbie
    ASL Info:    20/m/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 53/54/36
    Words: 225
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1096
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1157



    Description:
       i lost my wife our son will be 8 months soon


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    dotsR.I.P my lovedots
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    i lie awake every night
    wondering if im doing it right
    and if I made you proud
    sitting up there on a cloud
    there is just so much that i miss
    i still long for one last kiss
    tears just role off my face
    their is no one here to take your place
    me and our son now against the world
    my defences up and fists curled
    he is still so young when you had to leave
    i dont know what im gonna do when he tugs on my sleave
    and ask's where you went
    and all i can tell him is the time that we spent
    i still hope for that dream when you come to me
    and then ill once again get to see
    your beautiful face and smile too
    and hear you say i love you
    but untill then i lay here with a small smile on my face
    knowing that your in a better place
    i'll miss you till the day i die
    but one day i wont always cry
    at the thought of you gone from my side
    but im not going to run and hide
    i have to be strong and stand up tall
    just give me a sign im doiong okay
    and today starts a new day




    Submitted on 2010-04-25 06:16:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hmm I think you could work on your rhythm first of all, it goes kind of rough in parts of it.

    I'm sorry for whatever happened although time does heal your wounds, whether we forget about caring or things just get better. Talking usually helps tho :/

    good luck, keep writing
    | Posted on 2010-04-26 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]


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