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    dots Submission Name: creepdots
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    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 519
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       I've really gotten into free verse lately..


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    I hate sitting here, watching myself cry
    Black tears falling to the ground
    It's all over know, I never learned to fly.
    And I can't help but say I'm a creep
    The weirdo across the street you'll always resent.

    How much must I sacrifice till I'm perfect?
    Till I'm the thing you want?
    How much till I burn all the ugliness away?
    Till I'm just like him; or maybe better.
    You're so fucking special

    And I'm just that creep across the street
    That drowns himself in sorrow and misery.
    Looks like no cares again.

    I'm hanging onto that fabled dream
    broken destiny? Just another excuse to fail.

    I should have given up long ago.
    It sounded like the fools way out then.
    But now it sounds like a sweet mercy.
    But I still hold onto that little dream.
    That broken dream that only cuts through my soul
    With the sharpest knife, it stings, it burns!

    I'm just another creep.
    Why even bother?
    It doesn't change a thing.
    I'm nothing like him.
    I'll never be.
    And for that, you'll never want me
    Cause I'm just an excuse, a shadow, that thing you'll never want
    You're so fucking special.
    And I'm just fucking done.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Me again,
    I was wondering a few things, probaly random. This is not feedback, sorry! I was wondering if you knew how to do things like stalk someone or list my favorites, or edit my journal. I don't want to sound like a complete da or a begger. But if you have the time and know how it would be greatly appreciated!
    As always Peace,
    Mistie
    | Posted on 2010-04-26 00:00:00 | by mistiekidd | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you are writing about a girl, it was a very unique and curious read. I like it. I hope that the underlying issue of suicide is just a relase in a very intersting poem. It leaves me curious wanting more.
    Peace, love, & craziness
    The Kidd
    | Posted on 2010-04-26 00:00:00 | by mistiekidd | [ Reply to This ]


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