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    dots Submission Name: Tears that falldots
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    Author: heartless_
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    Words: 345
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    dotsTears that falldots
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    After every harsh word,
    After every cruel fight,
    You could never look at me,
    You knew the pain you caused.
    All the turmoil inside me started the day I met you.

    Every tear you have caused
    Every heartless moment you had.
    Just take it back; I donít want your memory.
    Letís just go back to the day we met,
    As soon as you say hello Iíd tell you goodbye.

    These tears that fall; come so fast.
    Blinding me from the happiness you promised,
    Said this was different told me not to worry,
    Youíd take care of me and love me.
    Said you could never leave me,
    So what did you call it?

    You knew how hurt I was,
    A broken heart that was barely intact;
    A sad look in my eyes that only just began to fade
    Pieces that just didnít go back where they should,
    Shattered I felt but you just held me and said it was ok.
    Said you would fix me and Iíd be better.

    Things go to tough for you so you left,
    Shattering what was left of me as you went.
    These tears that fall you have caused,
    Your exactly like the others, I fell for your lies.
    You didnít care about me at all,
    It was all about you and what you wanted.
    As soon as it became a problem for you
    You just threw me away to go to her.
    She always was what you wanted any way.

    You think I donít know why you left?
    I know how you talk about her, that look you get.
    Now your closer to her and canít see you and I together.
    So you threw me out like garbage to move on,

    You never thought to think of what you have caused,
    These tears that fall, o how I hate you for them
    I was so weak and fell for you, but I wonít wait around for you.
    Good bye to you and your memory along with these tears that you caused.




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      This poem is very good it reminds me of my mom and my stepfather my mom also gets treated like this and writes poems similar to these
    | Posted on 2011-06-11 00:00:00 | by madsmurph99 | [ Reply to This ]


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