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    dots Submission Name: Phantom Traildots

    Author: ParanoidParadox
    ASL Info:    22/m/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 89/92/41
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsPhantom Traildots

    I walk decrepit streets
    A stranger in the night
    They see me, shut their blinds
    Damning me upon sight
    Shadows dancing in patterns
    I am feared around here
    Whispers never once heard
    All their secrets held dear

    I am the cursed, the condemned
    Petals falling from rusted stems
    This is the place I once called home
    Now all the memories are gone

    Strange faces pass me by
    No familiar names
    This town is but a ghost
    And yet it seems the same
    A single light goes by
    Reflected in the pane
    Already come and gone
    A hope now but a stain

    Submitted on 2010-04-27 00:09:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      at first it made me think you were one of the damned, a creature of the night.. get what i mean? but then you switched it around and made the town seem damned. and im a firm believer in not all poetry has to rhyme. i really feel that its all about how it makes you feel, and this made me feel alone. so goodjob:)
    | Posted on 2010-11-29 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]

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