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    Author: istalkmurdoch
    Elite Ratio:    7.06 - 129/48/25
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 912
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Description:
       I wrote this randomly, and there really wasn't a point to it, although, I felt like I haven't been putting any work out there. So it's only fair to myself and whoever reads this stuff that I would contribute. Whether that makes sense or not, please comment, and tell me what you think.


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    I don't understand school
    I thought that it had a rule
    about what you do to others
    they will do you, you fool

    but they no longer believe in that
    the rule was eaten by a rat
    it doesn't matter either way
    now it's time to have fun and play!

    because learning doesn't matter anymore
    we put that away, it's time to explore
    it's so fun and exciting
    your jaws will hit the floor!

    but not me I must say
    I wish that the old would stay
    but the world isn't like that now
    don't try asking me how




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    | Posted on 2010-05-18 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]
      This tells of an emphasis on play,trivial thing that destroy albeit harm (jaw hit the floor) in some societies it is not so obvious but learning is low. Allow me say constructive learning is low. Imagine going to the library to study more on some maths. Then leave that to read some book on creating sexual satisfaction everytime. There thats learning but not for the maths as intended. What am saying is some societies are so updated,in vogue, info overload that they really are not as knowledgeable to various situational problems as they should. Sad but it exists in my country, graduates just aint fit to be employed but good for partying. Nice write. Mirrors sub conscious thought processes.
    | Posted on 2010-05-18 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]
      The Golden Rule was eaten by a rat, that is a whole book in one phrase! I mean, I like it.

    I don't think learning has declined. I learned something once, myself. It probably did me a lot of good.
    | Posted on 2010-05-02 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]


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