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    dots Submission Name: to impress youdots

    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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       A story about a girl's crush. I've been through many times. I've had a chrush on this one guy who sat next to me in world history and he never noticed I was there. Ugh!

    "If it was supposed to be easy, they wouldn't call it a crush."

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    dotsto impress youdots

    I spend hours on my hair.
    My make-up just right.
    So when you past me in the halls
    I might be in your sight.

    I drench myself with candy perfume.
    and Put on my favorite heels.
    So when you see me heading towards you
    your mind begins to reel.

    I flip my hair over my shoulders.
    laugh at all your not-funny jokes.
    So if you were to notice me
    you're heart would begin to choke.

    I sit the closet to in science class.
    I'm right next to you in art.
    I borrowed your pencil once
    and you borrowed my heart.

    I walk down all the halls you do.
    I'm always one step behind.
    I keep waiting for you to turn and see me
    my face in your mind.

    But you walk in front and away.
    so I guess I'll folow like I do.
    I dress, act, wear everything right,
    just to impress you.

    Submitted on 2010-04-28 10:58:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very cute! I think it captured the feeling very well. The only negative thing I have to say is that, I do think the flow was better at the beginning.
    | Posted on 2010-04-28 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]

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