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    dots Submission Name: Head in The Sanddots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsHead in The Sanddots

    Oh tiny mind of little earth
    What do you see
    Beyond your walls

    What do you seek
    To explain
    Other than yourselves

    Oh tiny mind of little earth
    You write your laws
    Of how the Universe works

    But every concept of your idiot rules
    Are bound to money
    And locked in time

    Oh tiny, tiny, tiny mind of little earth
    What do you see
    Beyond your walls

    Not the stars
    The galaxies are not there at all
    They are so very small

    Not the cells
    Nor the atoms
    They are so very small

    So what do you see
    Oh tiny mind
    Of little earth

    You see nothing
    But your tiny world
    Nothing but yourselves

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