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    dots Submission Name: Grown From the Splendordots

    Author: Sir Fusting
    Elite Ratio:    1.38 - 5/33/25
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsGrown From the Splendordots

    grown from the splendor
    the taste of the sun
    all too familiar
    when the day is done
    the feel of the wind
    pressed hard on my skin
    the feel of my hair
    blown here to there
    cliché as it is
    there's no compare

    riddled with time's embrace
    tickled with the sweet taste
    of age and knowing the chase
    testing the boundaries no more
    when the boundaries are set
    so clear on the floor

    the sweet scent of intent
    to do right and stay bright
    to capture each moment
    and hold it
    with care.

    it's not til to late
    that we realize fate
    had a different course
    with no remorse
    only knowing
    that the past is set in stone
    and the future has yet to be drawn
    though in the end
    I've known this all along


    Submitted on 2010-04-30 15:39:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh and sorry if that was harsh... :/ just being honest
    | Posted on 2010-05-02 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]
      It was sort of vague, and I found that it didn't flow very well in certain parts during the beginning. I can't really appreciate something I don't understand, consider revising.
    keep writing
    | Posted on 2010-04-30 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]

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