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    dots Submission Name: a quiet crimedots
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    Author: franki jorge
    ASL Info:    19/f/ca
    Elite Ratio:    0.82 - 5/12/54
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsa quiet crimedots
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    a silent cry
    a deadly tear
    a higher power
    a known fear

    a change of mind
    a big mistake
    a lingered moment
    a twisted fate

    a brutal judgement
    a plea of help
    a slight of hand
    a quiet yelp

    a distinctive laugh
    a muffled cry
    a lifeless girl
    a ruthless guy

    a guilty conscience
    a silenced soul
    a forgotten dinner
    and empty hole




    Submitted on 2010-05-01 11:36:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it is nice but it could use more feeling,seems so direct instead of making someone think.I like it overall.good job
    | Posted on 2010-05-01 00:00:00 | by crispylove | [ Reply to This ]


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