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    dots Submission Name: Long Worlddots

    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLong Worlddots

    I want the world
    Is it that much to ask
    I've seen it before
    But it left me so fast

    It's more beautiful than you could imagine
    Hard for any mortal man to get
    I'd endure endless torture
    To have it back with me yet

    Not that I'm not suffering now
    A less persistant man would cave
    But I'm driven from the memories
    And all the feelings you once gave

    You are the world to me
    It's all or nothing when it comes to you
    If I can't have my world
    I hope it will all be over sometime soon

    And lord I've tried
    All that I know
    For so much a glance
    Within your soul

    But I can't predict you
    I don't know how to win
    My all feels not enough
    Why won't you let me in

    Though I have nothing left worth to give
    And I fear we're through
    I'll keep giving all I have
    'Cause I long for you

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