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    dots Submission Name: Blood puddle angels.dots
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    Author: Sinincarnate
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1/0/2
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       a poem i wrote when i was a bit depressed, its ok though. life is wonderful and pain is only temporary. feedback would be much appriciated. also, check my other work, that will be featured in the july issue of Dark gothic ressurected magazine.


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    dotsBlood puddle angels.dots
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    blood puddle angels,
    sanguine supple angels
    damned and denied,
    my beautiful angels.
    stripped down and tried
    are my wonderful angels.
    robbed of their lives
    were my beautiful angels.
    in my heart they do reside,
    my sweetest angels.
    wiped clean of tears,
    my unholy angels.
    absent of fear
    my crimson death angels
    now there is nothing left,
    of my blood puddle angels.
    except a lone feather,
    darkest of angels.





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