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    Author: weepingwillow
    ASL Info:    23/f/Brighton
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 38/75/35
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       only Jimi comforts me these days


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    vacancies in my head
    the apex of what
    happened
    in my ab-(sense).

    seeeeeeeeearing heat employs me
    drained of the lust I extend
    it all plops into the muddy ravine surrounding the courtyard..

    I look out every day, watching spiky men and dusty girls who play with wheels and string

    here to help!! insisting with force

    tripping over all of the tiny stones with lament

    reachin out over bloated cloudscapes

    twisting your words for you,I waste,waste

    then flip,Flipp

    relishing my own heat

    hot as piri achar





    Submitted on 2010-05-02 05:28:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I didn't get it, it all just kind of wish washed around in my head like a dust ball O_O I'm sorry :/
    but I would like to see more of your work... please keep writing
    istalkmurdoch
    | Posted on 2010-05-04 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]


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