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    dots Submission Name: Dark Reddots

    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 464
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 425

       kinda ended up rhyming in the end.

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    dotsDark Reddots

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    her red shoes went,
    while her beauty shined
    as her hair wavered to each side
    with each and every stride,
    She walked with a glare that matched her flare.

    With Her crimson being so bright,
    she squinted her eyes very tight.
    Then the Darkness had arrived,
    and took her away
    which finally
    kept her at bay

    Submitted on 2010-05-02 11:00:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      first impression: didn't really get it lol sorry :-/

    although it sounds like a good beginning to a story, or one of those little paragraphs on the back of book that gets you interested...

    keep writing :P

    | Posted on 2010-05-02 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]

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