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    dots Submission Name: Undecideddots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 632
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 757



    Description:
       Kind of just a life question thrown out into the universe through experience based metaphors.


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    dotsUndecideddots
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    should he buy her a ring,
    and then I meditated

    harmony
    thoughts posess passion with their words
    I love you

    the sound of a pearl bead crushing underneath the waves
    lost to the ocean
    and smiling somewhere underneath
    as life turns still
    caught in your breath and awake
    inside your numb mind

    she notices the change in the wind and embraces
    what lies ahead over the mountain
    and the night the air and all the world
    humid and alive and silently humming underneath your feet as you slightly accelerate

    then you find yourself riding smoothly
    with her in your arms
    finding a way to find each other.





    Submitted on 2010-05-02 14:29:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it seems like every stanza has a story to tell, I really liked it, it would have been cool if you made it rhyme or something, and made it longer, although for right now it's a great piece of work and I can't wait to see what else you write. continue writing
    istalkmurdoch
    | Posted on 2010-05-04 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]


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