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    dots Submission Name: Motherdots
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    Author: Maskannai
    ASL Info:    28/Female/Utah
    Elite Ratio:    4.94 - 214/184/78
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 518
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    Description:
       A little poem I wrote to give to my stepmother for this mother's day.. The finished product is gonna be My hand print with my daughter's inside of it and then this poem printed on top, then matted and framed so it looks really nice..


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    dotsMotherdots
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    Mother...
    Grandmother...

    Both names are the same, you see
    it means you are a woman
    who's always been special to me;

    Once I was so small
    and you held me close
    you wiped away my tears
    and did the things that mattered most;

    I grew into a woman myself
    though the years have blurred right by
    and now my own little girl
    is learning to say hi;

    She is just as special to me
    as I have always been to you,
    and from us both this special gift
    says the simple words

    Mother...
    Grandmother...
    "We Love You!"




    Submitted on 2010-05-02 16:18:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is delightful! It is simple and honest, and straight to the heart, from the heart. The most precious word, reverred around the world, is "motherhood".

    Nice work, pretty lady!
    | Posted on 2010-05-04 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Hm. I like this, and your mother will love it.
    Its a splendid thing when love flows powerfully from one generation to another.

    Every seven years my birthday is one Mother's Day...so unfortunate.

    Anyhow, great gift you have created here!

    --Daisy
    | Posted on 2010-05-03 00:00:00 | by sensetofeel | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the poem; I'm sure your mother will be happy. :)

    I made some suggestions:


    Mother...
    Grandmother...

    Both those names, you see,
    Say how special you are to me;

    A ready smile to soothe my fears
    A warm embrace that holds me close
    A gentle hand to wipe my tears
    You're made of that stuff that matters most;

    The years have blurred right by...
    and now my own little girl
    is learning to say hi;

    She's just as special to me
    as I have been to you,
    and from us both this special gift
    says the simple words

    Mother...
    Grandmother...
    WE LOVE YOU!
    | Posted on 2010-05-03 00:00:00 | by albery | [ Reply to This ]


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