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Author: mistiekidd
ASL Info:    31 like it f Al
Elite Ratio:    4.49 - 37 /48 /65
Words: 166
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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A poem I just kinda wrote randomly. I was obviously not in a good relationship and losing hope on having one.


I hate this
I have no say,
suprize, here it is...
all your pain and failures,
all of your what if's
driving you insane.

You have been touched,
hurt, shamed, you know
that you'll never be the same!

Don't be dumb, you'll never
Your a soul lost and no ones
coming to find to, your not worth
the trouble, or the time.

This is you lost and alone, you'll
never be loved the way you deserve.
You are a problem one no man deserves.

Love is lost for you, it was once upon
a time.
Now it's a wish, a dream that won't
come true.
Accept it, no one is coming to find you.
You've ran and found your special
place, now you sit and cry because
you are such a waste.

You are nothing but an afterthought,
the girl whose name will always be forgot.
A girl never to be a women.
A girl best to be forgot!

Submitted on 2010-05-04 09:11:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I loved it and related greatly. Only bump is the end just didn't fit as well as the rest... and for me (as a guy) the submersion weakened a bit once you differentiated gender in the poem. I don't know... I guess I tend to prefer vague pronouns so everyone can relate. But other than that very touching, relate-able, and heartfelt. Good write.
| Posted on 2010-05-06 00:00:00 | by BlazeFlamme | [ Reply to This ]
  This has a strong feeling of someone being ridiculed and beaten down by words.. Very strong with emotions and the rhythm is well written.. The subject is, of course, a sad one, but you have portrayed the dispair very well..
| Posted on 2010-05-04 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]

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