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    dots Submission Name: Use To Bedots
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    Author: Linz
    ASL Info:    24/f/Ne
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 86/118/44
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 910
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 617



    Description:
       Another one about an ex of mine! Go figure right??


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    dotsUse To Bedots
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    I sit and try to listen to what your telling me
    Your actions are dfferent and I know you don't see
    If you have said one thing and it is still true
    Then maybe I'd be able to believe you
    It seems everything out of your mouth is twisted or used
    To let you know I'm not highly amused
    Take it and say it as you will
    I've already taken my fill
    I'm no just here on the side for you
    Its good you could find someone new
    How things use to be is how they should be
    Then I'd have no worring, things could just be.




    Submitted on 2004-07-24 23:52:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      o ya - and where are you from? where is ne man? i realized that might be part of the reason why the spelling and grammar is so bad.
    shard
    | Posted on 2004-07-25 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]
      Hm - spelling issues and grammar issues, but its all good. I like it, but it could use some more imagery - although the emotion is so raw that it shines through just the same.
    shard
    | Posted on 2004-07-25 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]
      Your words are pretty weak, but the expression is good. i'm not sure how to explain...the wording of the poem is good, makes it feel....real. but the presintation is weak, lacks any true emotion
    | Posted on 2004-07-24 00:00:00 | by DontSaveMySoul | [ Reply to This ]


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