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    dots Submission Name: The 1,2,3's of Hating Youdots
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    Author: Aangskate
    ASL Info:    18/male
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 133/117/44
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 637
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Dreading the barn...but not the barn itself...

    Wish the "I don't want"'s were italicized.


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    dotsThe 1,2,3's of Hating Youdots
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    Dread,
    Consuming and overwhelming.

    I don't want to see you.

    It is a nasty backbiter,
    A "gotcha"
    And a payback.

    I don't want to hear the whine in your voice.

    It digs your grave,
    Filling you with distaste.

    I don't want to see that pitiful look in your eyes.

    You cannot hold up against it,
    For it leaves you despairing,
    Deep within your soul.

    I don't want anything to do with you.




    Submitted on 2010-05-05 10:17:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can't relate, I mean I understand not liking someone, or rather not like what they are doing, but I don't think I could hate someone like that. At least the way that I look at life, that it is easier to not hate, than to hate. I'm not saying that you have to love everyone, but just hating takes too much work, and energy.
    keep writing :P
    istalkmurdoch
    | Posted on 2010-05-05 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]


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