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    dots Submission Name: The Holedots

    Author: Cayman
    ASL Info:    31
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 182/168/72
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Holedots

    I need to get out of this hole
    Life's highway is filled with a pothole
    Nourish my body with a loaf of whole....
    Wheat, and keep my head from going in a hole....
    Too deep, got to break away and find a hole....
    To crawl in, hide from danger or get put in a hole....
    Thatís 6 feet deep, gotta keep, and hope to fill that hole
    In my soul

    Submitted on 2010-05-05 16:40:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      him well i got the point I can tell you that right about now.... and from what I can think is when your looking to fill a hole, you need to what is needed and how much of it, but when your talking about something like this, things get a little harder =-/ sometimes we don't know what we need and how much of it we need.... but if you wait, patiently, generally something will come your way.
    Good Luck
    | Posted on 2010-05-05 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]

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