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    dots Submission Name: Flummoxed On a Rainy Daydots
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    Author: istalkmurdoch
    Elite Ratio:    7.06 - 129/48/25
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Misc
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    dotsFlummoxed On a Rainy Daydots
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    words that hurt like nothing before
    feet stomping against the floor
    I hate the feeling of all of this
    tell me that there's something more

    loving when that's all you've got
    stomach twisted into a knot
    through all this horror and abuse
    I must devise some sort of plot

    reading about flummoxed men
    but unable to lift my pen
    what will I do now?
    what will I do then?







    Submitted on 2010-05-05 17:34:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2010-05-06 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]
      At some point I thought of a writer abused at work to create an article. Wit a hurt love life all blended to cause feet stomping as ideas never blend enough to be built into a write up. Pls tell me if am wrong.
    | Posted on 2010-05-06 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]


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