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Talking to Myself

Author: InYuco Katan
ASL Info:    22/M/Tx
Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 43 /39 /14
Words: 230
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Talking to Myself

Talking to Myself
By: InYuco Katan

Numbness takes over.
Autopilot sets in.
No captin at the wheel.
Nothing but just wind.

Not a bird in the sky
Not a sound in the air
Emptiness all around
Nothing but thoughts to compair

Screaming until my voice is gone
but no one is around to hear me
Locked in this dungon for all time
All alone I'm trapted with misorry

I cannot escape
No matter how hard i try
I pull at the walls
just to hear him mock me

He says I am worthless
as my knees begin to quiver
He says I am weak
as my arms give out

He keeps nailing in the stakes
As I start to break
I drop down to my knees
bow my head in defeat

He laughs in my face
He pulls out a sword
He says I won
As he runs it through my heart

I sit there and laugh at him
A smerk on my face
He asks what is going on
as he withdraws the sword

I explain to him my heart is gone
Shattered a long time ago
And nothing left in its place
Now its time you go

He said one day you will get it back
then I will strike again
I smerked and said
Never not again.

Submitted on 2010-05-06 07:55:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  lol typo...haha bad...should use ms word not notepad.
| Posted on 2010-05-06 00:00:00 | by InYuco Katan | [ Reply to This ]
  in the fourth stanza, on the last line, was the word supposed to be "misery" ? misorry is not a word...

other wise I though it was very good, I could see myself in the tiny room...

keep writing

| Posted on 2010-05-06 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]

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