Neither Hope Nor Despair by particularshard

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Author:	particularshard
ASL Info:	23/m/DC
Elite Ratio:	4.21 - 1159/1392/363
Words:	137

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
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I'm a fool.

Neither Hope Nor Despair dots

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In truth I question the motives of anyone interested in me
In truth my history suggests that I can mostly tell who will treat me kindly
Memories swirl: she said 'It's for you!'
My body chose to respond, my mind wondered if it was true.
In reality that changes nothing about my current state.
Whether beneficent or maleficent, she's on my mind like a weight
I'm truly shocked that anyone new could still affect me like this.
It's a select and old group that I ever have missed!
I ponder and lick my lips where her kiss left a cut.
It's strange I want her company while to the rest of the world I'm shut.
Still I'm proud that I react with Neither Hope Nor Despair -
Still I run into this headlong, and devil may care.

Submitted on 2004-07-25 01:19:12 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I can hear the shards crunching under her feet. It wasn't enough to break the plate, she has to dance on the remains. I suggest gathering the bits and regrouping elsewhere. There are kinder infatuations... Goood write.
| Posted on 2004-07-25 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
  "I'm truly shocked that anyone new could still affect me like this.

It's strange I want her company while to the rest of the world I'm shut."

beautifully written, shard. heh!
| Posted on 2004-07-25 00:00:00 | by pawnee | [ Reply to This ]
  Hah, very nice. I think that just about anyone of the male gender can relate to this. Perhaps others can, as well. Women really are a double-edged sword (Though, isn't everyone in a way?).

This piece has unity, albeit a loose sort of unity. But that's not necessarily a bad thing, since it seems to suit the mood sufficiently.

I particularly like the last two lines. They have a pleasant ring to them, and flow very well.

Gosh, I wish had something bad to say about this poem, but nothing major comes to mind. Good work.
| Posted on 2004-07-25 00:00:00 | by Moose_Jive | [ Reply to This ]
  We are all slaves bound by love (or lust). Is it possible to free ourselves from their soft, powerful grasp? probobly not, but it's not that bad I suppose...
Heh, you know me.
| Posted on 2004-07-25 00:00:00 | by bloodwing | [ Reply to This ]
  Yes, woman can have that affect on us guys. How they do it? How they get us so caught up in them so easily? Oh well... I can't say I really mind. Wonderful write dripping with emotion. Nothing to criticise, nicely done.
| Posted on 2004-07-25 00:00:00 | by ACircuitShock | [ Reply to This ]

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