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    dots Submission Name: Set The Firedots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsSet The Firedots
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    Is it burning the world
    While drenched in this pain
    Just to turn the face of hate
    Inward

    Can you see where you are
    Is it anything you may have broken

    Still hanging yourself
    Still drowning yourself
    In the torture of another person

    And all the sorrow you are
    Burns into the world
    Of isolation

    Set this fire in your heart

    Quietly suffer the anguish of silence
    As everything you are
    Inside everyone else
    Is ripped open

    It’s not blood that flows
    But conscience

    Are you burning the world
    While drenched in your pain
    Just to turn the face of hate
    Inward

    Can you see who you are
    Are you someone who may have been broken

    Forever drowning yourself
    Killing yourself
    In the torture of another person

    Set the fire in your heart

    Take on the raiment of saints
    The sacrificial mantle of ordinary people

    It’s not blood that flows
    But conscience


    Any sacrifice we may have made in our lives
    Has been well worth
    The price
    Of their ignoble success





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      Wow! impressed this is an amazing post love how i can imagine as i read i feel what u write! its great! keep up the good work

    ~*Jackz*~
    | Posted on 2010-05-13 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      well i liked this for alot of reason partly because it reminds me of some stuff i am going through. amazing how different perspectives can be interpreted in one piece of work. i dont really have any compliants with this piece i thought you wrote it well. this would have to be my favorite part of the piece though

    Are you burning the world
    While drenched in your pain
    Just to turn the face of hate
    Inward

    Can you see who you are
    Are you someone who may have been broken

    anyway this was a great write keep it up thanks for sharing
    Joy
    | Posted on 2010-05-06 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the second stanza, even in those two little lines made me think a lot
    | Posted on 2010-05-06 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]


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