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    dots Submission Name: Systemic Errordots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 681
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsSystemic Errordots
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    Remind yourself there are no fences
    No walls
    No locked doors

    This is not a prison, for your mind

    Walk out
    Breathe the fresh free air
    Taste it
    Walk out, pick a direction
    Follow it
    Go anywhere

    “ None are more hopelessly enslaved
    As those
    Who falsely believe they are free ”

    Remind yourself, there are no borders
    No barriers
    No restraints
    No passports
    No countries
    No states

    And by all the aficionado’s of paper work
    Tracking systems
    And credit cards
    By the ownership of the legalised existence rubber stamp

    Claim you are free

    Free to choose
    Free to be

    Not you
    Not me
    A world enslaved
    To money

    “ None are more hopelessly enslaved
    As those
    Who falsely believe they are free ”

    The insanity of mankind
    Is not your madness

    You are conscripted into believing
    And taking responsibility
    For the mindless ghosts
    Who haunt our lives
    These paltry few who turn your every kindness
    Into a weakness

    They learned long ago
    That the gentlest of hearts
    Can be made to feel responsible
    And turned to guilt
    Though never having had and hand in the act

    They mire you
    And subdue you to shame
    As if by your very own hand
    You wrought and reeked destruction
    Upon your fellow man

    But, it was not you
    Even though we were so easily fooled
    As they appealed to every childlike response
    And lead us down this path of confusion
    They beggared and demeaned
    Your innocence

    Twisted and falsified the truth
    Bent their lair knots
    And re-wired their hang mans noose
    Until their deception
    Became the only way we could live
    They degraded and abused
    Our innocence

    And then turned on us
    And told us
    It was all
    Our
    Own
    Fault


    " None are more easily enslave
    Than those who falsely


    Remind yourself there are no fences
    No walls
    No locked doors

    This is not a prison, for your mind

    Walk out
    Breathe the fresh free air
    Taste it
    Walk out, pick a direction
    Follow it
    Go anywhere

    “ None are more hopelessly enslaved
    As those
    Who falsely believe they are free ”

    Remind yourself, there are no borders
    No barriers
    No restraints
    No passports
    No countries
    No states

    And by all the aficionado’s of paper work
    Tracking systems
    And credit cards
    By the ownership of the legalised existence rubber stamp

    Claim you are free

    Free to choose
    Free to be

    Not you
    Not me
    A world enslaved
    To money

    “ None are more hopelessly enslaved
    As those
    Who falsely believe they are free ”

    The insanity of mankind
    Is not your madness

    You are conscripted into believing
    And taking responsibility
    For the mindless ghosts
    Who haunt our lives
    These paltry few who turn your every kindness
    Into a weakness

    They learned long ago
    That the gentlest of hearts
    Can be made to feel responsible
    And turned to guilt
    Though never having had and hand in the act

    They mire you
    And subdue you to shame
    As if by your very own hand
    You wrought and reeked destruction
    Upon your fellow man

    But, it was not you
    Even though we were so easily fooled
    As they appealed to every childlike response
    And lead us down this path of confusion
    They beggared and demeaned
    Your innocence

    Twisted and falsified the truth
    Bent their lair knots
    And re-wired their hang mans noose
    Until their deception
    Became the only way we could live
    They degraded and abused
    Our innocence

    And then turned on us
    And told us
    It was all
    Our
    Own
    Fault


    " None are more easily enslaved
    Than those who believe
    They are guilty "believe
    They are guilty "




    Submitted on 2010-05-06 14:01:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sounded like a song, and it reminds me of your other poetry, always has something to say about everything :P keep writing

    istalkmurdoch
    | Posted on 2010-05-06 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]


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