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    dots Submission Name: Easier Said Than Donedots

    Author: istalkmurdoch
    Elite Ratio:    7.06 - 129/48/25
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       old one, but I really like it

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    dotsEasier Said Than Donedots

    Every thing we've given
    to the precious God above
    is covered with our claw marks
    along with our tears, sweat, and blood

    Even though these thoughts were painful
    we still take them back
    and try to give them away again
    when our brains go out of wack

    it supposed to be easy
    giving our burdens away
    but I find this to be hard for me
    even to this day

    the thoughts keep coming back
    and haunting my every sight
    no matter what I'm doing at the time
    the worst come at night

    when it dark and so lonely
    without anyone to talk to
    I feel like I'm in a big tunnel
    and don't know how to get through

    but of course the answers simple
    God is there for me
    I just have to be willing to give things up
    in order to be free

    the good thing is that God forgives me
    even though I've failed so many times
    and I know that these things soon shall pass
    so for now I write these rhymes

    Submitted on 2010-05-06 18:24:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      omg this is amazing!!!! omg check out my posts titled ... "Loved?" or "Dear Lord" you'd have to click on veiw ALL but this post is amazing I love how you allow your readers to see your weakness and as your reader reads on we see you still have strength no matter because God above is there with you! The beginng is amazig uhh i like your descriptve words it give me a sence of being able to see and imagine this ....


    | Posted on 2010-05-11 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      I like how it flowed. nice.
    | Posted on 2010-05-08 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
      I really loved it. I am going through the same spiritually right now. I just keep praying I will soon be able to break free. I truly honest piece.
    Love of Christ,
    | Posted on 2010-05-06 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]

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