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    dots Submission Name: WHO? I ask you WHOdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Serious
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    dotsWHO? I ask you WHOdots
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    I'd like to know
    what makes you think you know my limits?
    what makes you think you know Im pushing myself too much?
    WHO are you to tell me I am over doing it?

    No one can remeber all the times I have helped!
    Not a single soul acknowlegdes my strives to better myself within this envirment!
    Nor does anyone see or care to see all the doubles and triples I pull even when I am not meant to be there!

    SO AGAIN I ASK!!!!

    what makes you think you know my limits?
    what makes you think you know Im pushing myself too much?
    WHO are you to tell me I am over doing it?




    Submitted on 2010-05-07 07:41:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I know that this may seem a little nit picky, but my first impression was the fact that you spelled "environment" wrong.

    My Second impression was that you seem to have a lot of people around you, that you feel don't understand you, and have been giving you bad advice. What I suggest is if this is true that you would tell them so, I'm all for venting through poems, but if they're really any kind of friend, they'll understand if you confront them if there is an issue.


    I hope you don't get a bad impression on my comment

    keep writing
    istalkmurdoch
    | Posted on 2010-05-07 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]


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